Saturday, April 11, 2009

Live Water

The water is alive
it writhes in pain
as it twist and turns
along the bends
of the river floor
jagged rocks
break its pattern
sending ripples across the 
water, ever flowing
down the stream


Jim said...

Hi BP, this is good! It surely does hurt me to twist and turn even from sitting in the car.
Doing that across rocks would be awful, I would make the water ripple big time.
Keep it up, I read your others too. It would take me a long time to pick a favorite, I like them all!
"listening to the nothing
washing in your ears" wouldn't be very comforting to me; having my "mind pounce upon [my] boredom" would be some positive action to liven things up a little. :-)

gautami tripathy said...

Like the second line!

drumming water

anthonynorth said...

Poetically brought to life.

Greyscale Territory said...

Water has quite a dramatic role to play in our lives! Your poem captures the essence of the drama!

Fledgling Poet said...

How clever to think of water as writhing in pain...great read!

Sue said...

ah, the tortured spirit of the river -- no wonder it sometimes bursts through its banks and floods the plains. Beautiful imagry.

qualcosa di bello said...

i never considered water's path in such a reminds me of a rollercoaster ride

gabrielle said...

Living water feels pain. The scraping of rock beds on her belly But the flow is uninterrupted. Lovely.

floreta said...

i like the thought of water being alive.

Tumblewords: said...

Ah, the movement is audible. Excellent!

Anonymous said...

a fierce river flowing... i once found myself at the mouth of the columbia river in canada... we had planned on camping and arrived at night... just over the hill and down a few feet the river flowed in a trickle softly... later further down it was just as you say... beautiful

Tammie Lee said...

Nice movement in your poem.

Chichi said...

Very nice and poetic. <3

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